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Index - Instead of saying "Welcome to this small graphic site known as Anxiety" and "Here wer offer only layouts, icons, brushes, and icon textures", you should integrate some of the second sentence's words into the first sentence's. It should read: "Welcome to this small graphic site known as Anxiety by Tyler and Harper." so we know more accurately that this site and everything else is owned by you guys. Always start a topic sentence (first sentence) carefully so everyone understands. The second will read: "Here we offer only layouts, icons, brushes, and icon textures."I also have a problem with the next sentence, "This site shows the duo's best works, for others to see and use." It would be better off with: "This site shows the duo's best works--for others to see and use" because the comma isn't grammatically correct there.
I won't be nagging you on your update part because most of the time, people add on things like emoticons and slang, and I think that's your preference.
You don't need to add a comma after the October at the bottom of the updates area because there's no specific date; you can just leave it as "October 2007".
Just one last thing on this page: the header says "September Updates" when it's obviously already October.
Sitely - "The About page basically gives a small description of when and why Anxiety was born, whereas 'The owners' page, tells you about Tyler and Harper" can be changed to "The About basically gives a small description of when and why Anxiety was born; [whereas] The Owners [section] tells you about Tyler and Harper". It's confusing when you say "About page" because the link is only for one page, even though you've written "These two pages were combined into one". I don't think it's that important to tell people about they used to be two pages. They just want to know the significant stuff.
The Contact Us section should be written as "There's a form where you can write a message to us, asking us for advice, reporting errors on Anxiety, asking about how to use the content, and etc." instead of all of that writing. "There's" should be used instead of "Here is" because it's on a seperate page, but is more of my opinion than necessary. Making a sentence into a compound sentence is much easier, quicker and more fluent than ones that sound less mature and professional. Then after that first sentence, you should write "We'll answer back, but make sure to read the FAQ before sending in a question."
In the second sentence of the Past Versions section: "None can be copied..." should be written as "None may be copied..." because we are capable of copying your previous or current layout, and literally sounds more logical.
About Anxiety - The first sentence "...by none other then Tyler" should be "...by none other than Tyler" because "then" is used for sequence, but not comparisons and such.
It's also confusing that the narrator changed from third person to first in your second sentence, so you should add "...by none other than yours truly, Tyler" for the first sentence to indicate that you are now narrating.
"I went threw..." in the fourth sentence should be "I went through..."
The last part in the About Anxiety section that was grammatically incorrect, was the second paragraph, in which you wrote "Along with that, I expect that I'll improve my skills within owning this site, along with gaining more experience with my own talent." That sounds kind of repitive with the same words you've used, "along with". They make the sentence tone dull unless you use a diversity of words. I suggest you change it to, "Along with that, I expect that I'll improve my skills within owning this site[,] and gaining more experiences with my own talent[s]."
"The Webmaster/miss" is a little confusing; to erase the confusion, you should add a dash before the "miss" of "webmaster/miss".
There are also a number of errors in Tyler's section. For example, "Hikachu The ..." should have a comma seperating "The Sexiest guy on Earth" and "Hikachu". Right after that, it should read "The Sexiest Guy on Earth (I nicknamed myself that. I sound cocky, don't I?"
Also, I don't think many people will understand, "...my number one pwnzorz, Rene" unless they play games or have heard it before. Even though many do know "pwn", I doubt "pwnzorz" would be in their vocabulary. You should make your writing more understandable for the visitors.
In the second paragraph of About me for Tyler, you should've written "I can be an asshole, but mostly I'm just a weird, crazy, thirteen-year-old who people flee from", "...and penguins can dance", "So there's no big confusion..."
There're a few more errors in your writing, but I am assuming that since it's your preferred writing, you choose to write like "AND! I live in
In Harper's section, the second paragraph under About me should read "...people say I excel" instead of "...people say I excell" as well as "...pursuing a career in law or phsychology" instead of "...pursuing a career and law or phsycology".
One general point I would like to make is that the spaces between the paragraphs for Tyler's and Harper's are different, making it a little messy in the overall look of this page.
You should also put the newest updates on the top because it's more convenient for people to find the latest news.
Contact Us - Before the "Thank you", you should add a period or else the second sentence runs of without a period.
Frequently Asked Questions - It seems like you want more people to frequently ask you guys more questions, because the header reads, "Frequently Ask Questions" instead of "Frequently Asked Questions". The first sentence has a mistake: "...they've all been question to..." should be "...they've all been questioned to..." and you've forgotten the period after "So, I shall answer them".
The first answer, "...if you want more information, head to the about page" should be written as "...if you want more information, head to the About page", because pages are like names--they need to be capitalized.
The second question, "Does Harper have msn?" should be "Does Harper have MSN?" As for the answer, "...asking Harper's mom is she can get one" should be written as "...asking harper's mom if she can get one"; "Thats" should be "That's".
The third answer, "She even said so in her about page, if you had you read it. And yes, we do chat. Almost everyday" needs to be changed to "She even said so in her About page, if you had read it. And yes, we do chat (almost everyday)" or "...yes, we do chat. Almost everyday."
Instead of telling you all the little mistakes on this page, you should remember to add periods after a sentence is finished, like in question 4.
Also, answer eight should read "You just made Tyler feel more insecure than he is already". The second last answer should read "After all, it's..."
Past Versions - Your versions are very inconsistent in the way that you've written your details. I read "Name, date, creator, credits, about"; they should all have the first letter capitalized or none of them should have them capitalized. They are also very inconsistent with the spaces after the colon (:). Eg. "Name: Motion City" compared to this, "date:August 02 - NOW" is very different.
And instead of writing "un-allowed" in the Past Versions paragraph, you should replace that with an existing word like "prohibited".
But overall, I really love the way you constructed the layout thumbnails--they're very original and edgy.
Terms of Usage - Since on the Sitely page, you've written this page's name as "Terms of Use", you should leave this page's header title to "Terms of Use".
The first sentence should read "Please read the terms of usage and abide by them. Thank you." Following the rules is the same as abiding by them, so it'd make more sense to just write "abide by them" than both.
In the first rule, "No direct-linking, please use a free imageserver to host images from here, to where ever it is you're using them." should be rewritten as, "no direct-linking. Please use a free image server to host images from here to wherever it is you're using them [on]."
In the fifth rule, "Altering or Copying our icons or layout's are fobidden." could be better written as, "Altering or copying our icons or layouts are forbidden."
